-----Original Message-----
From: Sorensen, Paul
Sent: Friday, May 15, 2015 1:31 AM
To: Xu, Zhangbu
Subject: Re: [Starpapers-l] STAR Beam Use Request for run 16 and 17 (ready for collaboration feedback)
I believe there is an error in table 5-2. Isn’t CME supposed to be larger > in Ru+Ru and Zr+Zr? It’s listed as smaller < now.
-----Original Message-----
From: Carl Gagliardi [mailto:c-gagliardi@tamu.edu]
Sent: Thursday, May 14, 2015 4:05 PM
To: Xu, Zhangbu
Cc: rfatemi@pa.uky.edu; Aschenauer, Elke; 'Carl Gagliardi'
Subject: RE: [Starpapers-l] STAR Beam Use Request for run 16 and 17 (ready for collaboration feedback)
Hi Zhangbu (cc Renee and Elke):
I've made it through Sections 1-3 of the Version 12 draft BUR. I systematically tried to ignore minor typos, etc., that the PAC members should be able to read over easily. With that "constraint", I only have a few comments or suggestions so far:
-- General remark: The "Highlights" section is written in a very brief style. That's a good thing! But it means the knowledge that the PAC members bring to the document will be critical for them to understand everything that's discussed. (I admit that I had difficulty following some of the heavy ion highlights.) During your PAC talk, I could imagine that you might get one or two "what's this mean?" questions from members who had their interest tweaked by some figure. Be prepared.
-- Pg 13, Fig 2-9 caption: j_T is ~ Delta R * z * pT_jet. (The "* z" is
missing.)
-- Pg 16, 2nd last line: "... into a new ERA of lower x ..." (Admittedly, this is just a typo. But I simply couldn't read past it!)
-- Pg 33: The upper paragraph says Fig 3-2 is from p-Au running. The figure caption says it's from p+p. I suspect the figure caption is correct.
-- Pg 36: At present, there is nothing in Sect 3.2 "Dataset for inclusive jet and dijet A_LL". I'm probably the internal expert here. Should I prepare a brief paragraph and update our standard Runs 9+15 projection plot for insertion here?
I'll drop you another note after I've made it through the Runs 16&17 requests sections. I might (or might not) also have some retrospective suggestions for the Executive Summary at that time.
Carl